One of the best places in the world is Niagara Falls. I was there last week,it is a beautiful place. There are many hotels. I stayed at the Skyline Inn; it has an attached water park. The water park has five slides, a wave pool and a jacuzzi. There is also an outside pool. My children enjoyed the pool.
The falls are wonderful at night. There are different color lights shining on the falls at night. During the day the falls are amazing, many people go and take pictures. There is a boat that is called Maid of the Mist that takes you very close to the falls. The best view of the falls is on the Canadian side.
There are many entertainment and shopping centers.There are haunted houses and many houses of wax.The houses of wax has famous people made of wax. There is a restaurant called Planet Hollywood with great ribs. In that restaurant there are pieces of different movie scenes. I happen to notice a statue of Sylvester Stallone, naked in a movie I saw as a child. Everything looked SO fascinating.
If you would like to visit one of the best places in the world, I recommend Niagara Falls. It is four hours away from Michigan. The prices are reasonable and there is something for the whole family to do.
Hi Juan,
ReplyDeleteI have finally got this scored.
Here is what I would like you to work on:
1. comma splice--you have one in the first few sentences
2. I also see a few other mistakes with commas
3. 'different colored lights' I know it is strange, but that is how we say it.
Not bad overall!
:-) kristi
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